Wednesday, 4 March 2015

Mentor Sentences - Part II

Remember my mentor sentence from yesterday?
I have slipped the surly bonds of earth and danced the skies on laughter-silvered wings.
As promised: I asked my students if they would share some of their sentences. Not everyone was keen but here are some from the those who were:
I have abandoned the bloody shackles of prison and moped the land on long-forgotten charms. (Gab)
I have killed the anger inside of me and brought the best on I could be. (Jaz)
I have travelled the adventurous ocean of Atlantica and swam the darkest reefs with my sharp brown  spear. (Tiahnee)
I have sung the beautiful music of Australia and performed on bright-shimmering stages. (Sara)
I have surfed the light-hearted waves of shores and swum the waters on giggling-golden beaches. (Tayla)
I have left the tight hold of worlds and escaped the Earth on small-angel wings. (Avril)
I have caught the beautiful birds of Adelaide and brushed the clouds with the softest-white feathers. (Kyra)
I have driven the dry roads of Australia and jumped the jetty on sandy-wet beaches. (Nikita)
I have stomped the monster on Pandora and jumped off the castles on mountains. (Corey)
I have run the muddy track of Mount Magnificent and jumped the finish line on quivering legs.  (Riley) 
I have spun the sticky webs of spider and wrapped the flies on joyful webs. (Blaed)
I'm impressed. I hope their parents (with whom I've also shared this blog post) are too!

This relates to the following Australian Professional Standards for Teachers...
Standard 3.7 Engage parents/carers in the educative process 
Standard 5.5 Report on student achievement
Standard 7.3 Engage with parents/carers

3 comments:

  1. I've just shared this with the kiddos - they're watching me type on the Apple TV - and they all say thank you. Thanks kiddo!

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  2. They all made me say 'WOW'.
    I'm not sure of your classroom discussion focus, but the strongest theme I could feel running through all of these was a passion for this amazing country in which we live.
    Well done again and keep up the great writing.

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    1. I noticed that too, and was quite surprised. All of our WBWs (until yesterday) have been about Australia though so maybe that explains it?
      I'm very lucky to have a group of students who are amazingly keen to develop their reading and writing. These sentences are inspiring! Can't wait to see their next steps.
      Thanks for reading!

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